Friday 31 October 2014

Writing

The Boy And The Kingdom Of Toilet Rolls.

Bare Bonez:
Boy eating tea with family
Boy hates tea and spits it out
Dad gets mad and sends Boy to his room
Boy smashes hand on wall
Boy finds secret passage to toilet roll kingdom
Boy finds little toilet roll people
Toilet roll people try to feed him toilet rolls with a special chocolate sauce…
Boy refuses to eat it and trys to run away
Boy gets locked up bye toilet roll people
Boy escapes and gets back home
Boy becomes grateful for his food and never complains again
The End.


The Real Deal:
Their once way a Boy called Jim. Jim was very ungrateful for the food he got, he always got delicious chicken drumsticks and steak but he never ate it. He always stormed off and ate chips. One day he was given the most delicious meal chinese rice and sweet and sour pork. Everyone was digging in, except for Jim. His Dad asked him “What’s wrong” Said the Dad  “I don't like Chinese” Jim said, His Dad was very angry “GO TO YOUR ROOM YOUNG MAN” Jim frowned walked to the cupboard got some chips and stormed off to his room. His room was normally very quiet but this time, he kept on hearing little voices, marching and orders.

He began to get scared but he knew his Dad and Mom were still mad at him. He decided to investigate he put his hand on the wall and moved it around then a passage emerged he was confused but rushed in. Then right before his eyes he saw… A KINGDOM OF TOILET ROLLS! He was amazed their were little toilet roll people little shops little EVERYTHING!

Jim was getting crowded by the strange little people he asked them if they have any food.
They only talked in meep? all they said was meep some went off and came back with toilet rolls. For food? Jim asked, the toilet roll people looked at him and said “Meep” and nodded. He was disgusted and tried to run away. But they chased him and locked him up.

But the cage was made of toilet rolls so he smashed through and ran back home.

He then never complained about his food again.


1 comment:

  1. Awesome poem Riley. I like how you explained it

    From your buddy Jaaden

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